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SCRIPT
 * 1) 2 So here is our (Amanda, Olivia, and Lauren) script for the butcher/surgeon/medical story:

• Universal opening for all videos • Opening words – Do you know the differences between working in the US and working in Sudan? • Clip of typical working man in the US.  [Meet Joe, computer programmer by day] • Clip of him with a child at home.  [Father by night] • Clip of Gamar slaughtering goats and selling meat.  [Meet Gamar, butcher one hour] • Clip of Gamar setting dislocated bone.  [Doctor the next] • Clip of the Gamar’s work place • Clip of Joe’s work place • Clip of Gamar’s home.  [This is Gamar’s home] [The differences between these two lifestyles are substantial.] [Gamar does not have time to spend much time with his family, etc…] • Clip of interview “I like being a butcher best, I make more money. I can use my knowledge of bones from butchery to help my healing practice” • Interview with Joe at his office • Clip of interview “I taught myself how to heal.” o “I don’t send the people back to the hospital.” • Clip of empty DWB building. • [Why is this Doctors Without Borders location completely empty? Why is the help not taken advantage of?] • Clip of interview with Gamar talking about not sending patients to the doctors • Clip of busy US hospitals with lots of doctors. • Clip of another DWB building that is busy. • Pictures of the journey to be a doctor in the US, diplomas • Some closing words about our purpose • Other places to visit for information • Link to more videos by our group • Take 2 videos website • Closing image of Sudan

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__**Chiraayu:**__ I like your idea, but I think your one problem will be how you are narrating the story. To make the story more interesting I think the more narration, the better your video will flow. I do like the way you compare our society to theirs, but I don’t know if you want to include "Gamar's house" if your topic pertains to health/medicine in Sudan. (unless Gamar's house has something to do with health and medicine) I am not quite sure, but if you believe that is important for your thesis than keep it. I really like how you point out the point about Doctors Without Borders program. That is a great way to end the video. Nice work!


 * __Alex Daniels:__** I really like how you are comparing Gamar to the US doctor but like Chiraayu I don't really know how you'll travel from point to point. I think if you could find a way to make to compare and contrast each point without it being confusing with a lot of jumping around that it would be fabulous. As is this was a little bit confusing for me to read. I liked that you wanted to shift to talking about Doctors Without Borders and how no one uses it but I wasn't sure if that fit in with the comparison you were already making. This transition could work if you found a very good transition but it may be easier to just make that a separate video. All in all I think the comparison is very interesting!